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    dots Submission Name: The Gin No One Could Seedots
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    Author: azurwarrior
    ASL Info:    44/m/SoCal
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 86/85/63
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 622
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       an extreme family amidst affluence....


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    dotsThe Gin No One Could Seedots
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    Some things are better left forgotten
    Like the way the inside of that crooked arm looked
    As you were slapping me around.
    Your bitter, twisted mouth possessed seemingly by ghosts of your silence.

    The brutality just got worse
    Fueled by BeefEaters Gin she believed only she could see.
    Hidden under the luxurious stove. We were cursed. That's what nobody would see.

    Getting locked up IP
    The family lied and said I was the only one.
    So who do they believe?
    Guess which one?

    Then my brother got sentenced to life for murder.
    But at least he wasn't depressed like me.
    He got a trial.
    Not like me.

    My father died early
    He worked himself to death to escape mother.
    I'm not supposed to tell.
    I want her to have truth
    For taking our lives.




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      Yes! More truth.
    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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