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    dots Submission Name: Divine Interventiondots

    Author: Zabriel
    ASL Info:    22/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 122/120/63
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 818
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       This is a lament to God. It was inspired by a recent failed suicide attempt. I want no counseling or anything of the like. I can get that elsewhere. I wrote this to express what I was feeling, and my frustration with the lack of tools. I systematically searched for something to hurt myself with, finding nothing. I could not find a blade, my pills have disappeared, we are out of cleaning fluids, and I can't help but think that I am being kept here by something. Call it Divine Intervention if you will. I call it annoying.

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    dotsDivine Interventiondots

    You have saved me from the pit
    But for what purpose
    What further plans do you have for me
    When shall I have my rest?
    When shall I finally sleep?
    Pills are gone
    Razors have disappeared
    No guns, no knives, no toxin
    Nothing here to end my life
    No rope, no rafters, no end in sight
    Why am I still here?
    Remove my soul from this feeble shell
    The darkness surrounds me
    The nightmares never cease
    Lord of Heaven hear my prayer
    And grant me unbroken and dreamless sleep

    Submitted on 2008-02-05 01:38:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this. I can feel somewhat of a sarcastic rage that flows throughout the lines. And like you said in the description, it's annoying and i can also tell your iritated with all of your toys missing. Nice, i always look for emotion in a poem and yours shows plenty of that.

    ^_^ Cry
    | Posted on 2008-02-05 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]

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