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Tingle of a Dream


Author: lynn marsters
ASL Info:    20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32
Words: 60
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Tingle of a Dream



A tingle
Of
A
Dream I had
Crept upon
Me
In the
Moonlight
I was alone
But wanting

And I dreamed…




And then I woke
Soap bubbles
Burst the same

And
Now I know
You don’t love me …

And I know that now




Submitted on 2008-02-05 15:15:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like the feel of this poem. the pauses and a kind of, ambiguity about it. but i want more out of it. what were you dreaming, who are you talking about, how does knowing they don't love you make you feel. i like your style, but i think you could get more out of it. Good luck.
Regards, Kalinda
| Posted on 2008-02-06 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]


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