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    dots Submission Name: Tingle of a Dreamdots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTingle of a Dreamdots
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    A tingle
    Of
    A
    Dream I had
    Crept upon
    Me
    In the
    Moonlight
    I was alone
    But wanting

    And I dreamed…




    And then I woke
    Soap bubbles
    Burst the same

    And
    Now I know
    You don’t love me …

    And I know that now




    Submitted on 2008-02-05 15:15:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the feel of this poem. the pauses and a kind of, ambiguity about it. but i want more out of it. what were you dreaming, who are you talking about, how does knowing they don't love you make you feel. i like your style, but i think you could get more out of it. Good luck.
    Regards, Kalinda
    | Posted on 2008-02-06 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]


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