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a Breath of Lies


Author: lynn marsters
ASL Info:    20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32
Words: 202
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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a Breath of Lies


A
Breath

Confuses the skin

On the back of her neck

Near his lips


The breath,

Tells lies
And flutters
Across
And
Down
Into
Her
Heart

Her Heart
Feels the lie
Touches it
Caresses it
Flutters up
And tells her mind the lie

Her Mind
Thinks only
Of
him
And love
And lies

But he doesn’t love her

And her heart/skin/mind

Is bound to break


Convinced of the lie
That he never had to tell her

His breath breathed it onto her skin




Submitted on 2008-02-05 15:22:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow...this wzs really good it really showed how much you careed for this guy but how when he said he loved you he never realy meant it, how you were so deeply connected with him but he didnt feel that with you. Like your relationship was based on lies and what he wanted you to think maybe only to get one thing

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| Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by panzyrocker | [ Reply to This ]
  OH MY GOD!!!

How can this not have any comments? It is completely amazing.

And so realistic.

I love every single word...there is no point in trying to pick out a favorite line.

This captures perfectly that feeling of completely losing yourself in that lie.

I really, really love it!!!
| Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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