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    dots Submission Name: a Breath of Liesdots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsa Breath of Liesdots
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    A
    Breath

    Confuses the skin

    On the back of her neck

    Near his lips


    The breath,

    Tells lies
    And flutters
    Across
    And
    Down
    Into
    Her
    Heart

    Her Heart
    Feels the lie
    Touches it
    Caresses it
    Flutters up
    And tells her mind the lie

    Her Mind
    Thinks only
    Of
    him
    And love
    And lies

    But he doesn’t love her

    And her heart/skin/mind

    Is bound to break


    Convinced of the lie
    That he never had to tell her

    His breath breathed it onto her skin




    Submitted on 2008-02-05 15:22:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...this wzs really good it really showed how much you careed for this guy but how when he said he loved you he never realy meant it, how you were so deeply connected with him but he didnt feel that with you. Like your relationship was based on lies and what he wanted you to think maybe only to get one thing

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    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by panzyrocker | [ Reply to This ]
      OH MY GOD!!!

    How can this not have any comments? It is completely amazing.

    And so realistic.

    I love every single word...there is no point in trying to pick out a favorite line.

    This captures perfectly that feeling of completely losing yourself in that lie.

    I really, really love it!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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