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    dots Submission Name: True Beauty?dots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 612
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    Description:
       I through this togethe during a silent class.. It's not to good. Oh well any and all comments are apprecaited. Enjoy.


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    dotsTrue Beauty?dots
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    Can't think,
    can't breath,
    can't see,
    can't wait...

    I'm tired,
    of being used,
    of being told
    I'm beautiful.

    Beauty is
    from within.
    You can't see it
    with your eyes.

    Only with your heart
    You chose to feel things,
    emotions,
    they hurt you.

    I don't know,
    what do you want.
    You cannot love
    what you don't know.

    You've fallen
    into a trap
    Waiting
    for me to help.

    I won't
    I'm to scared.
    How beautiful,
    am I now?




    Submitted on 2008-02-06 10:12:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      kat, i truly believe everyone's beautiful in some way... whether one believes that or not is one's own struggle to overcome, i guess. but if you do believe, it becomes easier to see other's shineyness bursting through.

    just my thoughts in response.
    ~
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]


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