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    dots Submission Name: Abyss of you eyesdots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    18/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 37/50/33
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 99
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    dotsAbyss of you eyesdots
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    To see you everyda is a blessing, to hear your voice is an honor and, just being with you is all I need.
    I long to feel the softness of your lips, to see every detail of your body, to show you how I feel in a way words can not exprees.
    I'm traped in your gaze and I don't want to escape.
    I'm traped in the deep abyss of you eyes.




    Submitted on 2008-02-06 11:40:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      one reason i really like this poem is the fact that you use eyes rather than another body part. im the kind of person that is obsessed with eyes. they are so beautiful, and for people like me....they show who you really are...i love to get trapped in anothers eyes,....its jsut tantelizing.
    AWSOME write
    ~kayla~
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by lonely goth | [ Reply to This ]
      It is sweet and short. I like it maybe you could add a little more to it but it is fine the way it is. Have a good day ^-^
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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