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    dots Submission Name: Anxietydots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    18/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 37/50/33
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    Bytes: 567



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    dotsAnxietydots
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    I lay down on my back, I can't sleep cause I'm falling.
    Eyes on my teeth, I can't see cause I'm eating.
    Head full of noise , I can't think cause it's crushing
    Back on my feet like a frate train on coming.
    I cry in my sleep and my eyes start a bleeding.
    I my body feels numb cause I'm losing all feeling.
    My body is lusting and feeling so needy.
    I'm losing myself cause my mind is depleting.
    Can't everybody feel like I do.
    Can't everybody feel like I do.




    Submitted on 2008-02-06 11:47:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hehe, I get the underlying message, but there are quite a few spelling errors. Please do correct and I'll comment back, k?

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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