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    dots Submission Name: Whispered dots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 51/66/54
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 140
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsWhispered dots
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    Peppered sunlight
    tickles the breeze
    winds soft sneeze
    sways the sweet smell
    of wild flowers
    gathered by grace.

    Clouds of lace
    slowly pace
    the floors of heaven
    painted a deep blue
    only found in the
    dreams of angels.

    As my breath escapes
    and my words
    walk gently
    to thier destination
    I wonder if.....

    you feel the same way.




    Submitted on 2008-02-06 13:48:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was cute. i like the simple rhyming and the imagry that you used. good job and keep it up. this would be the perfect V-day poem to put in a card...good luck with future poems and love
    toodles
    Katie
    | Posted on 2008-02-06 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]


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