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    dots Submission Name: The hardest part of lifedots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       This is what happened when i went to break-up with my boyfriend, and it was one of the hardest decisions i have ever had to make.


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    dotsThe hardest part of lifedots
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    As we sit on the couch
    With your hand holding mine
    I think of the things that need to be done.
    The words were unspoken,
    But we both knew them true.
    I tried to speak what must be said,
    But my mind and my mouth, could not understand.
    Finally, the words were told
    Of hurt and deception,
    And of a love that was torn.
    The tears ran down freely,
    And you wiped them away.
    You pulled me into your arms,
    And there was nothing we could say.
    My tears were still flowing,
    And my heart still in two,
    But for a moment I was lost,
    And it was just me adn you.
    With my make-up all smeary,
    And some on your face.
    You kissed me with tenderness,
    And I felt my control slip away.
    I didn't want to leave you.
    I felt so alone,
    But with a kiss on the cheek,
    And a hug,
    I was gone.




    Submitted on 2008-02-06 16:11:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A great deal of painful and conflicting emotion is poured out here.... most well and most ably done throughout... bravo.. bravo.. bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. I loved it so much I cried. This is exactly what happened to me, only we weren't on the couch. Wow, this was.... I don't know what to say. It's like you were spying on me. Anyway, the poem was good, but as I said in my last comment, I kind of stumbled over the last few lines. Around the last six lines. Other than that, perfect! keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »MIss MIsery«
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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