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Without your touch my warmth is gone As is my heart and soul Our memories and moments (Though so dear to me) Haunt my nights with cold When my pain finally ceases And my broken life is healed I will only wish for our moments Which are lost and filled with fear I can still feel your light kiss As you pressed your lips to mine And your soft lingering fingertips Are always close to mind But I will hope for our lost moments As the tears fall down my face And I will long for your endearments Which may never find their place Our together has come to an end And with that I must bid my adue But my heart is still with you As is my tattered soul And you still have my forever AS our lost moments are silently torn |
This was written very well. I loved it. I know exactly where you're coming from. My ex moved on before we even broke up. Three months later, he's still the object of my affection. It sucks, doesn't it? Anyway, the poem was great, consistant rhyme, good flow, but at the end I kind of stumbled. Somewhere around the last four lines. I'm not sure why, I think it ceased to flow as well as the rest of the poem. Other than that is was great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading »MIss MIsery« | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ] | |