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    dots Submission Name: Lost momentsdots

    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Everything seems to be goning down hill as my ex moves on and i am left behind with my emotions and my broken heart

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    dotsLost momentsdots

    Without your touch my warmth is gone
    As is my heart and soul
    Our memories and moments
    (Though so dear to me)
    Haunt my nights with cold
    When my pain finally ceases
    And my broken life is healed
    I will only wish for our moments
    Which are lost and filled with fear
    I can still feel your light kiss
    As you pressed your lips to mine
    And your soft lingering fingertips
    Are always close to mind
    But I will hope for our lost moments
    As the tears fall down my face
    And I will long for your endearments
    Which may never find their place
    Our together has come to an end
    And with that I must bid my adue
    But my heart is still with you
    As is my tattered soul
    And you still have my forever
    AS our lost moments are silently torn

    Submitted on 2008-02-06 16:21:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I loved it. I know exactly where you're coming from. My ex moved on before we even broke up. Three months later, he's still the object of my affection. It sucks, doesn't it? Anyway, the poem was great, consistant rhyme, good flow, but at the end I kind of stumbled. Somewhere around the last four lines. I'm not sure why, I think it ceased to flow as well as the rest of the poem. Other than that is was great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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