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    dots Submission Name: sweet princess of the treedots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotssweet princess of the treedots

    slip back the whispers
    past your pale length of life
    &, with your stoic tongue,
    breed a myth of longing
    where your eyes adore.

    sweet princess of the tree,
    reclaim me.
    & let steel-fisted weather
    ignore not
    the fettered moon
    of evening.

    slide forward
    into new futures
    where your hands reinvent
    the path across my brow.
    live free in the still of things
    where others arms are never subtle.

    i've cherished something simple
    in the shadows of my sleep.
    that time recreates
    the memory of itself
    & that what's lost now
    will be refound in my dreams.

    i need bluish hands
    in the flapping of the night.
    my voice slips through cracks
    on a bended course to you.
    watch me
    as the blood escapes my eyes,
    these little peices of the heart
    i give to you.

    Submitted on 2008-02-07 03:47:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dude... this is so awesome! i love the flow and the rythym... so good! and the story it tells is beautiful!!! great work!
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      Perfect. No clichè in this one at all. And the syntax of your second stanza was beautiful.

    I picture the last three lines of this poem in slow motion falling from a building. that has been over taken by vines, for some reason.

    Your poetry has a deep homage to nature, I feel.

    The entire thing hit different parts of me so perfectly, it was like making love to Angel, my friend.
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Renè Magrete | [ Reply to This ]

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