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    dots Submission Name: The paindots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    18/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 37/50/33
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsThe paindots
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    I feel a deep depression coming over me but I don't know what it is.
    It's like a sad feeling in the pit of my heart, I almost want to throw up.
    my body is shaking for some reason and my site is slowly fading.
    I feel a num all over, my chest feels like it's been hit a hammer many time over.
    It's so hard to breath, i feel like i'm dying but if it were only that I would soon be at ease but the pain continues to destroy my body from the inside out.
    I can't stand it, MAKE IT STOP, MAKE IT STOP. I want to die, I want to drop dead, but if only it were that simple.
    The pain hurts but there's nothing I can do but await death.




    Submitted on 2008-02-07 07:27:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay spelling is important
    num - numb
    dying - dieing

    I would suggest breaking it up into stanzas, other than that, good job :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I definetly know the feeling, but the key is to know that even though it feels like the pain will never end, it does so just take it one hour at a time and stay busy with good friends.
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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