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    dots Submission Name: The world dots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
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    dotsThe world dots
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    This world is rotting and, those that are making it rot deserve to die.
    Everyday we walk outside aware of the dangers that lerk in the shadows.
    The fear each person have everyday, the fear of wondering will today be my last day alive.
    Well it ends here, I will chance this world in to my ideal.
    Someday I will show you my dream of a bright and ideal world. I am a trickster that does not know suicide only treachery.




    Submitted on 2008-02-07 07:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Deathnote huh
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]
      This world is rotting, and those that are making it rot deserve to die.
    Everyday we walk outside aware of the dangers that lurk in the shadows.
    The fear each person has everyday, the fear of wondering will today be my last day alive.
    Well it ends here, I will change this world into my idle
    Someday I will show you my dream of a bright and ideal world. I am a trickster that does not know suicide only treachery.

    I thought I might give some help. Maybe its not help? Oh well I did like what you wrote.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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