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    dots Submission Name: The Callingdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 677
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 925



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    dotsThe Callingdots
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    I decay physically,
    Emotion sick, I purge the rest,
    Of what's left,
    In pestilence, and a surge of death,
    Black thoughts press
    My mind -Unrest- causing me,
    To check the LED red,
    That's been calling me,
    To let go of this pillow,
    Where I fall into my dreams,
    Wait till 4 am,
    There to get a couple z's
    So please, tell me please,
    Why do these plague me?
    All these dreams of nights
    I remember vaguely,
    they say we dream,
    but mine are always hazy,
    And lately, I'm thinking,
    I've been going crazy,
    So I decay physically,
    Emotion sick, I purge the best,
    Of what's left,
    In pestilence, to encourage death,
    Black thoughts press
    My mind -Unrest- causing me,
    To check the LED red,
    That's been calling me,




    Submitted on 2008-02-07 11:39:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Alright, here I go again.
    So one idea I thought subconsiously and I dont no if its right. Maybe when you say the light your refering to that phrase thing "Go to the light" ? I really dont no about that thought lol.

    You could be talking like and illness of some kind (duh -_- lol)
    So when you say "I purge the rest,
    Of what's left,
    In pestilence"
    Are you talking about killing or ridding your self of the disease, like the cancer treatment?

    Hmm tell me if im even remotely close.
    -Safire
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay so this is what I THINK it means. Your emotionally sick, so its killing you slowly physically?
    You wish for death, and keep falling into unwanted painful dreams?
    This was what I came up with.
    Like I said im unsure, but I really love the way this sounds. Tell me if im right.
    -Safire
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont really understand this... You have a good vocab but I dont get what this poem is about... Maybe if u told me what its about I can critique better?
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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