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    dots Submission Name: How Can I?dots
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    Author: Squall Leon Hea
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104/79/29
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHow Can I?dots
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    How can I tell?
    And get out of this shell

    Tell what's in my heart
    But that's the hard part

    Can't talk about
    Such things loud and out

    Why does it have to be
    So , so hard to see?!

    Why can't it be you and me
    Living forever happy and free

    But can not get that far
    Because this is the way things are

    Sorry but I have to say
    So please listen if you may

    To say this I don't know
    After all that you have saw

    I-I still love you
    H-Hope you love me too




    Submitted on 2008-02-07 14:11:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Of course I love you. :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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