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How Can I?

Author: Squall Leon Hea
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How Can I?

How can I tell?
And get out of this shell

Tell what's in my heart
But that's the hard part

Can't talk about
Such things loud and out

Why does it have to be
So , so hard to see?!

Why can't it be you and me
Living forever happy and free

But can not get that far
Because this is the way things are

Sorry but I have to say
So please listen if you may

To say this I don't know
After all that you have saw

I-I still love you
H-Hope you love me too

Submitted on 2008-02-07 14:11:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]

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