This discusses alot but it shows very little.
Just thought I would add that...
I mean its an interesting idea, for sure. And it portrays the title but it seems like thats it. Walking away from this I remember nothing, like the words just seem to mold into each other until I'm left with a sort of emptiness, like...thats it?
I dont know, thats just what I got from it. Maybe try to encorporate an ending? a main point that is coming across? or you can leave it like that, I'm not sure if you want that feeling of "thats just it..." in it or not. If so, then good job. If not, well then i dont know.