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    dots Submission Name: I Can't Promisedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI Can't Promisedots
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    I can't promise that love is real
    Or tell you that it never goes away
    All we have is this moment
    And the memories we make today

    I can't promise you'll never hurt
    But I'll be here when you cry
    There'll always be a question
    But all we have to do is try

    I can't promise you'll always be blissful
    And that there won't be tough times
    But I can assure you that I'll try to make it work
    If you just assure me that you're mine

    I can't promise you won't get tired of me
    Or I won't become annoyed with you
    But I think we could make the best of things
    If we have the conviction to see it through

    I can't promise you won't be tempted
    But I'll never be led astray
    The time may come when we'll grow apart
    But we'll be here for this day

    I can't promise that I'll be perfect
    But I'll do the best that I can do
    You can see inside my heart
    And I could fall in love with you




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      This was written very well. I loved it. It flowed well and the rhyming was consistant. Perfect. I ave a poem similar to this to my ex, he didn't care. Hope everything goes well for you!! Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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