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    dots Submission Name: Perfect Slumberdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Falling asleep...


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    dotsPerfect Slumberdots
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    There's something different about those moments
    In which you're drifting off to sleep
    The world seems so much clearer
    And the thoughts come from so, so deep

    There's almost something surreal
    About the touch of sheets against your skin
    The warmth of breath against your pillow
    Sensations equivalent to sin

    There's something sweeter about the music
    That drifts into your ears
    The words have so much more power
    The meanings are undeniably clear

    There's absolute perfection
    In the thoughts that flit through your mind
    Every second has a deeper meaning
    As you leave reality behind

    There's something different about those moments
    In the Sandman slowly creeps
    As your eyes gently close
    And you glide into a blissful sleep




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      How true is this, on a very literal sense I found it handy to keep a pad of paper and a pen next to the bed because I swear that there is a brilliant idea waiting to be born in those minutes before you fall asleep,
    I like it,
    Thanks,
    Spin
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      nice story and excellent structure and rhyme scheme! You have great talent gal! One actually feels that mystic mood that comes over one just when drifting off to sleep!

    Sorry I haven't been by more often! I have a tendency to come on for short periods, as I usally take a short break from running the business to come here and check posts.

    I always enjoy your writes!
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this peom. It has a really good flow to it and the message speaks the truth. Some many ideas come to your mind as your drifting off to sleep. I really enjoyed it. Good Write
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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