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This Letter Unwritten


Author: Jingles
ASL Info:    19.m.canada
Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18 /60 /36
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This Letter Unwritten



This letter was unwritten,
unsigned and unsent,
wishing I had told you
how much you really meant.

More than the sun
means to the sky,
more than a child
or a sweet lullaby.

More than it's wings
mean to a bird,
more than the words
I love you are heard.

More than the dreams
of folks old and young,
more than any song
could ever be sung.

More than your beauty
so innocent and true...
this is how much
I really love you.




Submitted on 2008-02-08 06:20:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Excellent right. Simple but right to the point. It kept my attention the entire time. I don't really think that you could change anything to make this better.

There was a part that I had to go back and read because I read it wrong, and it confused me.
"More than it's wings
mean to a bird"
The "it's" referring to the bird threw me off. I didn't see that at first.

Keep writing.
:]
Katherine
| Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Katherine_Music | [ Reply to This ]
  aww this poem is perfect for the holiday. wonderfully written.
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
  Deep dude, I like it, nice idea and well written.
| Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem was so simple, yet beautiful. It was really sweet and romantic, and I loved it!

Best of luck and keep on writing! :)

Eliza
| Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]


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