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    dots Submission Name: This Letter Unwrittendots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 734
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThis Letter Unwrittendots
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    This letter was unwritten,
    unsigned and unsent,
    wishing I had told you
    how much you really meant.

    More than the sun
    means to the sky,
    more than a child
    or a sweet lullaby.

    More than it's wings
    mean to a bird,
    more than the words
    I love you are heard.

    More than the dreams
    of folks old and young,
    more than any song
    could ever be sung.

    More than your beauty
    so innocent and true...
    this is how much
    I really love you.




    Submitted on 2008-02-08 06:20:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Excellent right. Simple but right to the point. It kept my attention the entire time. I don't really think that you could change anything to make this better.

    There was a part that I had to go back and read because I read it wrong, and it confused me.
    "More than it's wings
    mean to a bird"
    The "it's" referring to the bird threw me off. I didn't see that at first.

    Keep writing.
    :]
    Katherine
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Katherine_Music | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this poem is perfect for the holiday. wonderfully written.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      Deep dude, I like it, nice idea and well written.
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was so simple, yet beautiful. It was really sweet and romantic, and I loved it!

    Best of luck and keep on writing! :)

    Eliza
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]


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