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    dots Submission Name: Meeting on a Pulsardots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 850/653/234
    Words: 297
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Pulsar: A rapidly rotating neutron star. The radiation from such a star appears to come in a series of regular pulses (one per revolution), which explains the name.


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    dotsMeeting on a Pulsardots
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    Take me to a pulsar, the far asylum

    Take me to this reminiscent torment

    Where the hours are marked solely

    By the smiles in the wind

    I know that he is there

    Plead with him to meet me…

    …Meet me on the pulsar,
    It's bruises…my frolicking lust -
    They go knocking on my dreams
    Even when the uninvited nights are vague and velvet
    The blinding, the shimmering light of it's beams
    Steals me away from my cradle on the landscape

    I almost opt to iron my tears
    And I'm trapped…you know and remember -
    My heartbeats are uneven
    They're just like that pulsar, ruined and see-through
    Hard to believe in
    And they fail to move on as I am forced into a rush

    …Oh, how I LOVE!…

    The remorseless wait is a drone
    And these lips are obscure…they calm when they writhe
    With those ounces of caprice
    You stowed on their petals
    No poisons, no peace
    But one philharmonia and a night of unease

    It's a trebuchet of ruin
    In clandestine space where those hidden traces of the Sun -
    My squirming destruction,
    The residue of something so real - plant magnolias -
    The star-crops of seduction
    Where 'just about' hopelessness is never enough

    So leave me on this pulsar, the far asylum

    Leave me to this reminiscent torment

    Where the hours are marked solely

    By the cries in the wind

    I know that he was here

    Once












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    ||| Comments |||
      You write with elegant passion. Sometimes your poems, like this one for example, are 'pure passio'n on 'vibrating words', that I can barely read it - as the synesthaetical being that I am - without the fear of an 'emotional implosion'.

    The rhyme is very subtle, and in places I might say... perfect. Like:

    "With those ounces of caprice
    You stowed on their petals
    No poisons, no peace
    But one philharmonia and a night of unease"

    or

    "It's a trebuchet of ruin
    In clandestine space where those hidden traces of the Sun -
    My squirming destruction,
    The residue of something so real - plant magnolias -
    The star-crops of seduction"

    As in many of your poems, I hear the 'echo' of my own 'feelings'... strange. You seem as dwelling somewhere in the realm of muses half of your time, for your words are like 'glacid fire'.


    PS : I love pink, fluffy, thulian rose, amaranth 'stuff'!!! ^_^ As a new 'chapter'... I'm a 'soul in transition' as someone once said. I'd add... in perpetual 'autopoiesis'. Did you know 'amaranth' is considered the color of 'immortality'?
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]
      A very potent piece from your "pen" as usual! Almost like a song lyric. I personally love poems that describe some aspect of deep space, and pulsars are waaaay out there! "trebuchet" is a great word--French in origin, I think--I will have to use this in a poem myself! Loved it, loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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