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    dots Submission Name: The Pen.dots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Pen.dots

    The pen to the knife and all in-between,
    The soul mothers caged the aging of dreams,
    Wondrous colours of a time lost long ago,
    In a drifting silence least forgotten buried in the withered snow,
    Caged gasping animals rage,
    Of days before the mirth forgot the sage,
    Before the cold moon blew past the winters rage,
    Or forgotten time, forgotten rhymes, forgotten melodies of bell chimes,
    The pen to the knife and all in-between,
    Mans cover the knowledge understanding left to bleed,
    And here we sit on either side,
    Left to wade within the black blue carton,
    Left to dream the aging dreams all but misbegotten,
    And there we sleep,
    Upon the window seal,
    The open drifts of cages released the quill,
    And there she wanders wonders blissfully aware,
    Unaware, blissfully aware,
    Awaken to the smog flames,
    The bleeding,
    The fair trades,
    Awaken to the nightmares, the same shares,
    The God’s wares.
    There we sit,
    And there we stand,
    There the pen meets knife,
    There the rivers burning fight,
    There the dreams age cold and the morrow’s bleeding old,
    There we left forgotten the tragedy lay within, without, the holy snow

    Submitted on 2008-02-08 13:27:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It has an alliteration to it that makes it work wonderfully. I enjoyed the repitition pulling me to the next line (or lines) below. It seems to be more about a feeling than any particular image... I thought it was wonderful.
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      Always a pleasure to read your work Ira, this is no exception. I think you gave a great description of the God's Wares.

    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]

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