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    dots Submission Name: Dream World dots
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    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDream World dots
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    Have you ever dreamed you were the moon
    And sat among the stars

    Have you ever dreamed you went up in space
    And discovered life on Mars

    Have ever dreamed you were rich
    And had expensive cars

    In your dreams you live the life
    You always wish you did
    You show all your secret goals
    You thought you had so well hid

    Because when you're in your dreams
    The world is yours
    Or so it seems

    But as the sun comes in the sky
    Your dream world seems to fade
    And with the opening of an eye
    Gone are the wonders that you've made

    But soon the dusk takes the light
    And as you start to say goodnight
    Your world of dreams comes back in sight




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