I agree with Duvvy (er... Draumrkopa)... this should have gotten more comments. In the other poem you have up I mentioned putting more facets into the work, more emotion that the one thing...
Well luv this is ideal, this is what I was referring, and I shoulda looked at this first...
Good job, the emotion gets across very well and the images are fantastic.
I suck at giving compliments. So take it as it is :D
Yes, I think it is really well written. and wihtout any spelllling mistaeks. Tahnk you. Ok, more serious now. I love the imagery you put into this poem. And truthfully, maybe because I'm reading this Nora Roberts book, I thought at the end of the poem, she was going to jump off the cliff (the character's ancestor did that and it was her destiny not to repeat her mistake.)
And with your problem, doesn't everyone have that problem? I try a hit and miss strategy, it's not working out very well.
Well, good poem and I hope to read more from you.
I really like this poem it's very well written. I LOVE that unlike most people on this site you used correct punctuation and spelling. That really means alot to me when I read a poem!
Wow. I'm surprised that even with 12 views (of course including me) no one has commented on this one. It's one of my favorites of yours, and I loved it the first time I read it, and still do. It tells a sad but beautiful story, one that most people can relate to. I love the imagery of the girl standing on the cliff, and of her hair blowing in the wind. It brings to mind images of Pochahantas (think I spelled that wrong...). But those were my two favorite details in this poem. I'm thinking that the line "Sadness & self-pity overwhelms her" should be "Sadness & self-pity overwhelm her", I don't know if it's grammatically correct, but it just sounds right in my head, ya know? Well, that's my bit, and I hope that you post more soon...
Submission Name: Pocahontas & I Reflected
