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    Author: hateyourlove
    ASL Info:    15/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 19/14/14
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 83
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 845



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       Hello there. I would really like people to COMMENT. Anything please. Critize, compliment, suggests?? I still need a title for this one. I just finished writing it and I'll probably edit it soon. This is just a quick rough draft. ANY IDEAS FOR TITLES OR ANYTHING I SHOULD ADD TO OR TAKE OUT OF THE POEM?


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    The violinists are playing too fast for me to keep up

    And my heart skips a beat and is instantly onto the next

    But my partner is dead on the floor and the crowd keeps telling me to keep on dancing.

    I'm racing through my thoughts, sorting and organizing them trying to rearrange into something that makes sense

    My skin becomes cold as my feet hit the floor

    With great elegance I spun round and round until my knees began to shake and my body could not support its own weight

    I crashed to the floor beside my partner, and my hands began to bloody and the knife seemed to almost appear in my hands

    I looked down in horror as I realized that the glinting blade was buried deep in his back and I was drowning in a pool of his innocent blood




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      Wow. This is very good. Now for a name...all I can think of is "The Dance" or "A Death Dance" Sorry, I know they're bad, but I can't think straight.
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Zyiera | [ Reply to This ]



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