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    dots Submission Name: The Fury of Lovedots
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    Author: hateyourlove
    ASL Info:    15/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 19/14/15
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 553
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 497



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    dotsThe Fury of Lovedots
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    Things never exactly work out the way you plan them in love.
    Love is always changing it's mind, becoming angered with it's descisions and ruining itself

    Love is volatile and never consistant.
    It's a destructive path which affects everyone and everything

    Love is hurt and abused.
    Love is forgotten when it needs to be remembered the most.

    Love does not change it's mind and you must play the cards you are dealt




    Submitted on 2008-02-08 21:00:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm I like the idea of this one and it goes well but hten the end sort of doesnt rlly work with it, I think if you developed it more you could have a more powerful piece.
    ~flora~
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good. agree with all you said. great work
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Romantic Girl | [ Reply to This ]


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