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    dots Submission Name: A Goodbyedots
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    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA Goodbyedots
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    I am saying goodbye
    To all my friends.
    Telling them I'll be back
    When I'm close to my end.

    I'll write them all letters
    Sealed with a kiss.
    Signed, 'With Love'
    P.S. I can't do this.

    Pick me up
    And let me fall.
    I just want to be able
    To get through it all.

    I want to come back
    But I'm being held down.
    My emotions are in control
    And I'm afraid I might drown.




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      i like that you are able to convey a message in such a small piece of work. i know that life isnt what some of us thought it would be but at 16 you are not young but you are not old. their are many things that you are going to see in life that are going to make you question wether or not its worth it. at sometimes it may seem that its easier to walk away then face up to what life dishes out, but if you can handle it and you can tough through it you will be stronger in the end and then will you be able to understand that life gives you what you can handle and doesnt ask for anything back except that you make something of this life.
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this so much. i know a lot of people will be a ble to relate and at one point i would have to had i read it at the time. its just like you said. you wo0uld send out a note and tell them all its going to be okay and then you disaapear and maybe you did drown but you know what. its going to get better, yo. i swear. you cant just let it all get to you. stay cool.




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    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this. I have a real problem with depression. and have wanted to check out a time or two. you show a desire to have your friends understand your pain and yet you don't want to bother them. I always find that they cannot relate because they have no idea how we feel. 'they let us fall and we have to get back on our own. But we CAN do it, YOU can do it. I hope I saw the truth in your poem. It seemed like something I may write at times . Well done however. Good going! Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]


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