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    dots Submission Name: An Addicts Imagedots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 166/205/96
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       It's about a heroin addict od'ing and dieing.




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    dotsAn Addicts Imagedots
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    Addicts image built bad passage
    By fear brought temptation

    The tracks tragic tale built
    Deep within his wrists

    The needle and the spoon
    Alkaline images dilute

    His imaginations crippled
    Reality falls short

    Spoken softly “one more time”
    Breathe deep, wheeze, stop.




    Submitted on 2008-02-09 01:24:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Honestly, I was hoping for a bit more emotion. Maybe it's just me, but I just don't get the feel of an addict. When I think heroin addict, I think of guilt and shame of the habit, the numbness of realizing that the drug isn't pleasurable anymore and that the addict is trapped in a chemical prison. Perhaps the rush and excitement of anticipating one more hit, or the burning sensation as it courses through the addicts veins. Maybe panic at the face of death, or more likely, an opiate dream fading into blackness.

    It just seems completely oblivious to any actual addiction or detail to any history or memories associated with it from the addict's perspective. Just something to think about.
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]



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