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    dots Submission Name: To every guydots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Yes I kno its shit, but i needed to write.


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    dotsTo every guydots
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    To every guy who I trusted,
    Said they were better than the rest
    To every guy who hurt me,
    And put me to the test
    To every guy who cursed me,
    in their demonic ways
    To every guy who held me,
    through the worst of my days
    To every guy who told me
    what I didn't want to hear
    To every guy who forced me
    to bring back all these tears
    To every guy who I said nothing
    in reply to all their words
    To every guy who stood by me, who cared for me and more.
    To every guy,
    I'm sorry, I cant repay you now.
    Its over, guys, its over.
    Theres nothing more to tell.




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      "To every guy"

    For a start:

    SEXIST SEXIST SEXIST SEXIST

    "in their demonic ways"

    So inspirational,

    "a coup de grace!"

    So unbearably cheesy,said a thousand times before,forever and a day etc,CHEESE!

    "To every guy who forced me
    to bring back all these tears"

    EMO EMO EMO poor little girl who cant scratch the surface of her emotions...

    Beyond: hey Im well aware this sucks but I need to write it down for ME...

    ON AN ONLINE WRITING WORKSHP!

    -Craig





    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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