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    dots Submission Name: it won't hurt me nowdots
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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsit won't hurt me nowdots
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    my life is a reminder
    sometimes both good and bad.
    my past a gloomy presence
    the tragic life I've had.

    my memories they haunt me
    each night I lie awake.
    wondering what's next to come
    how much more you'll take.

    my relationships they break me
    leave me unfulfilled.
    the pain it is relentless
    but this is your will.

    my choices continue being worste
    though I try my best.
    this life I'm in is tragic
    and a food I can't digest.

    I feel so empty every day
    though I should be proud.
    I've seen alot of places
    but my goals are in the clouds.

    what can I do different
    how can I conform to you.
    My maker, what could be done;
    to start my life anew.

    how can I stop this feeling
    restrain and conceil regret.
    what can I surrender now
    to make me just forget.

    when can I just live again
    when will I belong.
    how can I keep going on
    when this feels so wrong.

    tell me what to do now
    to make this go away
    what can stop this nightmare
    that's called my day to day.

    I don't want know the outcome
    I just want to live.
    tell me what I have to do
    and all that I must give.

    help me just this one time
    show me where to go.
    give to me the things in life
    that most all others know.

    I need for this to go away
    if only I knew how.
    how do I forget the past
    so it won't hurt me now.




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