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    dots Submission Name: Oncedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       The sadder side of love.


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    Lips once warm, but now are cold
    Her loving smile long gone
    No sparkle in her eyes for me
    Her love, it has moved on

    Words once touched my very soul
    Now linger in my mind
    I try my best to find a way
    To leave them all behind

    Joy once found beyond compare
    Has turned to sadness deep
    How can I hope to carry on
    When all I do is weep

    Faith once true that love was all
    Which lasts eternally
    But now I know that love can cause
    Such total misery

    Hope once more if love does call
    It will find me straight and true
    But yet I fear like yesterday
    It will break my heart in two






    Submitted on 2008-02-09 11:43:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Of course, this is another excellently crafted poem. I dont believe that you can write a bad poem!
    Of all the wonderful odes to love that you have posted here, this one moved my heart the most.
    To experience love can bring the highest highs and the lowest lows that emotions can go through; and you've expressed that perfectly here. And although this theme is not new by any stretch of the imagination, I believe the hope that you wove through all the highs and lows made this poem special among all the other love poems that can be read.
    Hope has been a lifeline for me...a survival tool.
    Now, I can see hope in the ups and downs of love. And that's a good thing.
    Thanks for sharing this poem with us, Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This was excellently written. It reminded me of wordsworth in some respect and yet entirly you. The rythmn was wonderful and the words so very true. you are a true poet. Thank you for sharing, Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Napoleon Hill, in his book, "Think and Grow Rich", described the loss of love (of someone) as one of man's worst fears! And so it is; we invest our greatest resources to find it, and live in terror of the loss of it!

    This wonderful poem has all of your usual brilliance and then some! I enjoyed this one much (I'm a survivor of two divorces)! But then, I always know when I visit your site and open up the page on a new poem, it's gonna be good!!!

    Aaah, but here's lifting a glass yet again to love! May her arrows pierce all our hearts, and may we bleed willingly and joyfully for the pain of it!
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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