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Author:	Frank Maguire
ASL Info:	51/ UK
Elite Ratio:	2.33 - 1580/1148/209
Words:	129

Class/Type:	Poetry/You left me
Total Views:	167
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	762

Description:
The sadder side of love.

Once

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Lips once warm, but now are cold
Her loving smile long gone
No sparkle in her eyes for me
Her love, it has moved on

Words once touched my very soul
Now linger in my mind
I try my best to find a way
To leave them all behind

Joy once found beyond compare
Has turned to sadness deep
How can I hope to carry on
When all I do is weep

Faith once true that love was all
Which lasts eternally
But now I know that love can cause
Such total misery

Hope once more if love does call
It will find me straight and true
But yet I fear like yesterday
It will break my heart in two

Submitted on 2008-02-09 11:43:33 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Of course, this is another excellently crafted poem. I dont believe that you can write a bad poem!
Of all the wonderful odes to love that you have posted here, this one moved my heart the most.
To experience love can bring the highest highs and the lowest lows that emotions can go through; and you've expressed that perfectly here. And although this theme is not new by any stretch of the imagination, I believe the hope that you wove through all the highs and lows made this poem special among all the other love poems that can be read.
Hope has been a lifeline for me...a survival tool.
Now, I can see hope in the ups and downs of love. And that's a good thing.
Thanks for sharing this poem with us, Frank.

| Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  This was excellently written. It reminded me of wordsworth in some respect and yet entirly you. The rythmn was wonderful and the words so very true. you are a true poet. Thank you for sharing, Jerilynn
| Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
  Napoleon Hill, in his book, "Think and Grow Rich", described the loss of love (of someone) as one of man's worst fears! And so it is; we invest our greatest resources to find it, and live in terror of the loss of it!

This wonderful poem has all of your usual brilliance and then some! I enjoyed this one much (I'm a survivor of two divorces)! But then, I always know when I visit your site and open up the page on a new poem, it's gonna be good!!!

Aaah, but here's lifting a glass yet again to love! May her arrows pierce all our hearts, and may we bleed willingly and joyfully for the pain of it!
| Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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