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    dots Submission Name: Falling Apartdots
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    Author: x-Kerry-x
    ASL Info:    18 F UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/8/25
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsFalling Apartdots
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    Tears are streaming from my eyes,
    As you walk away,
    Hearing the door slam,
    Feeling my heart break.

    Holding my head in my hands,
    Curling up on the sofa,
    Feeling the walls close in,
    Loneliness sets in.

    Rapidly falling apart,
    How could you break my heart,
    Leave me here to rot,
    I never thought I'd hate you so much.

    Feeling like a little child,
    Lost and so confused,
    Not knowing whether to get up and move,
    My soul is permanently bruised.

    20th Nov 07




    Submitted on 2008-02-09 13:00:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      lots of emotions. i like ur writing
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one...I think this is how every break-up feels at first..Great write...I can relate...
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]


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