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    dots Submission Name: Don't touch me!dots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    16/f/Beijing
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 177/240/109
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 85
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    dotsDon't touch me!dots
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    "Dont touch me!"
    My words are belting through the air.
    Don't touch me!
    Don't pretend like you care.
    Don't speak, please.
    Your lies fall fast.
    Don't speak, please.
    I wish to forget the past.
    Don't walk, run.
    Far away from me.
    Don't walk, run.
    So you can barely see.
    Don't look closely.
    Because I'm close to tears.
    Don't look closely,
    I'm showing all my fears.
    Don't smile, unknowing.
    Of all thats meant to come.
    Don't smile, unknowing,
    You have nothing to be won.




    Submitted on 2008-02-09 13:28:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like your use of repetition. It realy drives the emotion home. The feeling that I get from this is scared, like someone saw something you were tring to hide like someone knew your deepest fear and put light on it.

    Thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by ashik | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. I really can relate to this poem. This sounds like something I would feel in certain situations. I really enjoyed this.
    <3
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Heidiluv | [ Reply to This ]



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