summer retreat
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summer retreat
thunder storms over summer shore skim stone ripples smooth overlaps rain drops kisses the river's face creases sand and leaves footfalls fade into log cabin door creaks open then shuts |
Submitted on 2008-02-09 16:30:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| very haiku-ish in feel and reduced syntax and all that technomologicalismical stuff. i thought aussie was a desert? or perhaps you're talking about the queensland rainforests, eh? i'd like to go there one day, and perhaps snorkel/scuba dive around the great barrier reef... not too fond of sharks though (recently swam with a few unknowingly, until my friends told me to get the hell out fast... and i was like what... oh, those dark shadows? thought it was seaweed... oops)... what a rambly-pambly comment. ~ | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ] | Interesting imagery. It gives a soft, nostalgic emotion without resorting to specific events. It's like a little peak into a memory. Very nice work, thanks for sharing! | | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ] | Simple and beautiful! I love it and am putting it on my fav's list. My only sugestion is on this line to take out "the" | footfalls fade into the log cabin | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by ashik | [ Reply to This ] | |
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