thunder storms over summer shore
skim stone ripples smooth
the river's face
creases sand and leaves
footfalls fade into log cabin
door creaks open then shuts
| very haiku-ish in feel and reduced syntax and all that technomologicalismical stuff. |
i thought aussie was a desert? or perhaps you're talking about the queensland rainforests, eh? i'd like to go there one day, and perhaps snorkel/scuba dive around the great barrier reef... not too fond of sharks though (recently swam with a few unknowingly, until my friends told me to get the hell out fast... and i was like what... oh, those dark shadows? thought it was seaweed... oops)...
what a rambly-pambly comment.
|| Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ] || Interesting imagery. It gives a soft, nostalgic emotion without resorting to specific events. It's like a little peak into a memory. Very nice work, thanks for sharing!||| Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ] || Simple and beautiful! I love it and am putting it on my fav's list. My only sugestion is on this line to take out "the"|
footfalls fade into the log cabin
|| Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by ashik | [ Reply to This ] |