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Dawn Breaks


Author: ashik
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Words: 42
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Dawn Breaks



The dawn breaks through to clean the murk of night
The sun peeks out from the sky
Soaking up the dew of midnight’s troubles
The dream of last night’s life seeps out of sight
Silently creeping away for another night




Submitted on 2008-02-09 18:13:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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