Fool in a Box

Author: ashik Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 50 /37 /31 Words: 59

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Fool in a Box

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Run jump scared free sneer. Trick trap freeze hold sneer, Don’t let life go Precious gift Hold dear, press close to heart. Run ~ wall Jump ~ wall Scared ~ wall Free? Fool in a box demon sneers Tricked ~ cry Trapped ~ cry Freeze ~ cry Free? Fool in a box demon sneers

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Huh...interesting? It's definitely very fluid, though I wouldn't say by way of thought. Is the message something like: a lot of things may happen to you in life and you may end up in many places than you started before, but that's what life's about. Embrace it. ?? At least that's what I got. Suven

| Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]

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