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Fool in a Box


Author: ashik
Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 50 /37 /31
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Fool in a Box



Run jump scared free sneer.
Trick trap freeze hold sneer,

Don’t let life go
Precious gift
Hold dear, press close to heart.

Run ~ wall
Jump ~ wall
Scared ~ wall
Free? Fool in a box demon sneers

Tricked ~ cry
Trapped ~ cry
Freeze ~ cry
Free? Fool in a box demon sneers





Submitted on 2008-02-09 18:16:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Huh...interesting?
It's definitely very fluid, though I wouldn't say by way of thought.

Is the message something like: a lot of things may happen to you in life and you may end up in many places than you started before, but that's what life's about. Embrace it. ??

At least that's what I got.

Suven
| Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]


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