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This is Me (This is You)

Author: ashik
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Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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This is Me (This is You)

This is me
This is you
Society built
Anger filled
Pain is real
Pain won’t fill
Cut here, no crimson fell
Deeper and deeper
Ahh… that’s better
Just then I know I am still here
The crimson pulls me away with painful tears

Submitted on 2008-02-09 18:18:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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