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    dots Submission Name: What Love Isdots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
    ASL Info:    19/F/CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 44/54/47
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 169
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 868



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    dotsWhat Love Isdots
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    Every day I open my eyes
    I see everything as useless lies.
    To me nothing ever seemed true
    Until I laid my eyes on you.

    Your sweet, passionate gaze
    Set my heart ablaze.
    My heart is all a flutter
    Knowing that there can be no other.

    The times we cherished
    Can never be perished.
    My life being the best ever
    I promised to leave never.

    I promised to take your worries
    To try and make them useless stories.
    Seeing all of your tears
    Made me more scared than the worst of my fears.

    Some say what I have done is not just
    The one I loved I lost his trust.
    People ask me what is love?
    To me, it isn't what I thought above.

    Love to me once was everything
    Love to me now is nothing




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      im not sure, but for some reason this strikes a chord in me.

    i enjoyed it thoroughly, although the phrase " I promised to leave never." kind of threw me, it doesn't entirely flow too well.
    | Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. form. I haven't noticed a form in your work till now. I also like the theme, as it is similar to mine...
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. this is really good. This is the best I think of what i have read of your work. I really like the last 2 lines. Most of the rhymes were great. I say most because i see you were really trying to rhyme, but sometimes that resulted in it being a bit unclear. But other than that once or twice, I thought it was brilliant. good write. :)
    | Posted on 2008-03-15 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]


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