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    dots Submission Name: restless shades of bluedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsrestless shades of bluedots
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    i've seen pictures
    sound & glow
    & draw themselves
    into my dreams
    at night.

    the frozen stills
    inside my secret brain
    delete me.
    & the cloudiness of living
    dooms & swallows
    through my life.

    detangle from me
    in my swollen mess.
    deep breathing
    stuns the bloody waking.
    it's cold in here
    & i'm stumbling through sheets
    & memories in 2s.

    i wish the drowning of the night
    inside me.
    to know it
    drifting in my skins.
    i find it hollow here
    in restless shades of blue.




    Submitted on 2008-02-09 22:51:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Overall i like it. Lots of emotion. Good write.

    -Dorian
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Dorian Grey | [ Reply to This ]


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