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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    20/f/WA or IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 354/433/185
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 110
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1167



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    The wine glass that overflows,
    with sparkling cider, and a heart that knows
    I should not be here
    and I am not wanted
    if my place was just taken
    if I was so quickly forgotten.

    So go home.
    Turn the radio up just
    go home.

    Little phrases on scraps of foil
    "See how much your heart will hold."
    A year ago there were fortunes
    a year ago I felt just fine
    But a year ago you were still
    at the back of my mind.

    I just go.
    I don't say anything I
    just go.

    Big black hill in the dark in the rain
    Do Not Enter sign go out the other way
    Down through the backstreets
    Slipping clutch under my feet
    Ten miles out on this unknown road
    I try to make things better
    But it's futile like the weather and I
    just
    want
    to

    Go home.
    I just want to go home.
    I can't get out and I
    can't find my way.
    I had to go but
    I should have stayed I just
    want to go home.
    I want to go home.




    Submitted on 2008-02-10 00:59:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this. I especially liked the lines

    "See how much your heart will hold."
    A year ago there were fortunes
    a year ago I felt just fine

    I thought it was a great piece.
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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