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    dots Submission Name: Meltdots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 387/168/65
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 184
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 263



    Description:
       I woke up with the words from a dream lingering.


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    dotsMeltdots
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    Cool Blue,
    Glacial melting
    Into
    Intensely fiery passions.
    Body- trembling, shaking
    Under soft, breezy caresses-
    Into
    Green, green valleys,
    Culminating on its’ lofty peaks.

    What you do to me.




    Submitted on 2008-02-10 13:06:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this as it is but I think you should have expanded it into a longer poem. It's just a vision that while beautiful has no deeper meaning to the reader. Maybe just another line in the end to tell us what this dream meant to you.
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome seriously keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by LovesAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely, Megan!
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      what form of poem is this. It seems to have purpose in he amount of syllables in each line. It is verynice anyway. I liked it. Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]


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