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    dots Submission Name: the panda moondots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe panda moondots
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    & where does the time go,
    having spun from these lofty heights
    without you?
    the root of the world
    gnawing strange teeth
    into my insides.

    i found you screaming
    in the distance
    torn & covered in blood
    like some sacrificial
    goat of youth,
    clutching at the peices of your heart
    that wouldn't go back in.

    & i noticed
    that you sacrificed yourself
    for the sake of suffering.
    misery repeats
    in your eyes
    like a record.

    & what does that make me?
    in some self compromise
    i've found romance
    in the wilting of love.
    i'm just the same record
    playing backwards.

    i often bleed into my own dreams.
    & lately they seem scattered with you.
    maybe that's why sleep
    escapes me.
    i need to see white trees,
    the panda moon upon you.
    then the end of the world
    will come to me.




    Submitted on 2008-02-10 15:11:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "...clutching at the pieces of your heart
    that wouldn't go back in.

    & i noticed
    that you sacrificed yourself
    for the sake of suffering.
    misery repeats
    in your eyes
    like a record."

    her body is an hourglass and it's ticking away. once again you've outdone yourself merlo. finding the beauty in simplicity and drawing it out untill that's all we can see.


    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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