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    dots Submission Name: dektdots
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    Author: strangeling
    ASL Info:    22/M/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 58/82/59
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 756
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    dotsdektdots
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    note to the management
    wrote to the establishment
    in order to only change the hands of it
    owed now we made demands of it
    what's the damages
    he paid the man and split
    looked back once and spit
    took something funny laid it bare
    the one he braided out of maiden hair
    when he left he simply left it there
    on the dresser there
    near the window opened for to relieve the glare
    hopin the breeze catches it up
    happened upon the open air
    i wrote a message and dropped it on a shattered bottle
    really only a sentiment to seem novel
    wishin it rains soon so it garbles








    Submitted on 2008-02-10 17:04:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm. while on the one hand i have no real idea about the actual subject manner. i really did enjoy he poem.

    "i wrote a message and dropped it on a shattered bottle"

    this line in particular caught my eye, lovely.
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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