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    dots Submission Name: Hathordots
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    Author: Jakirina
    ASL Info:    19/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216/200/80
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 553
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    Description:
       Hathor is an Egyptian Goddess of women and motherhood.

    This was an assignment. We were given hieroglyphics to look at and write a poem of what we thought the writings said. It was kinda weird, but I came out with this.


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    dotsHathordots
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    Bronze;
         A pallet of glass
         and sunset wine
         raw, pungent and feline
         Antimony angling each eye,
         kohl thickening their veil.

    Gold;
         wringing neck,
         lifting each breast,
         curving each hip,
         entrapping wrists,
         tightening around an upper arm
         just below the insertion of the shoulder,
         and constricting a flowing thigh
         just above the knee.

    Water;
         Bones supple as snakes
         following the river
         to fertile lands
         hidden between
         modest flax.

    She is my Queen.




    Submitted on 2008-02-10 18:52:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mystical...

    I hope you received a top mark for this assignment because you really did an outstanding job. These concepts are stunning. The imagery, the style, the expressionism...they fit this mystical endeavor so well.
    Even your title is original.

    These are some of the lines I liked best (though the entire poem is 'extraordinaire'):

    "A pallet of glass
    and sunset wine",

    "Bones supple as snakes
    following the river
    to fertile lands
    hidden between
    modest flax."

    Wonderful!

    ~*~P~*~
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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