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    dots Submission Name: Six Characters in Search of Expositiondots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsSix Characters in Search of Expositiondots
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    Six Characters in Search of Exposition


    Freddie Wainwright is only seven. His future has been compromised by an over-affectionate "uncle" who stays every few weeks and sleeps on the floor in his room. If only Uncle Hans would stay on the floor...


    Della Phunt, a lonely, fifty-two year old spinster and former Sister of the Order of Our Lady of Perpetual Hope, lives across the street from Freddie and pines for her first date. .”If only Uncle Hans slept on my floor,” she sighed...


    Major Tommy Treadway lives in a home made bunker near the local landfill awaiting an invasion from either Osama bin Laden or Colonel Sanders. 'Ghastly unprepared townsfolk,' he muses...


    Maybell Teeters is a former director of a shelter for wayward girls and an incurable romantic and occasional flasher. “Perhaps I’ll slip into my new heels and pay the Major a visit,” she ponders. “I may even wear clothing this time…”


    Carissa Treadway longs to be a librarian and often studies the curious titles of the dusty volumes in her father’s collection. Flipping through crisp illustrations and tiny hieroglyphs, she weeps. If only she could make the words stand still…


    Mayor Chester Longwood stares into the darkness in the bedroom of his snug estate absently whistling the Star-Spangled Banner as he muses the frozen moment of another day. “The safest little town on earth,” he says to no one in particular as he drifts into the soft folds of sleep, unaware that a dying satellite is about to crush the comatose soul of the tiny town.


    Gently, gently, gentleness…




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      The title is so apt here... and I like that it could just be the 'background' of characters. Or, I can twist it as characters being 'exposed'... kinda like 'the secret lives of' type thing.

    I love the names as they are humorous yet fitting, as they give the characters a bit more depth.

    there is a lonely thread that runs here until you get to the Mayor... little does he know... ha. ignorance is bliss somedays...

    Anyhoo, another interesting write from you.

    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      it reads like snippets from a comic... all fully realised scenes with a lot of potential. do you mean to join these all together somehow? it'd be interesting if you did.

    these are all very quaint english names... ella phunt stands out a bit though... sounds almost like elephant...

    you know, if you've got a friend who could draw up a storyboard of some sort, that may help gel this together.

    carissa treadway's story held the most interest for me. and... well, the whole thing was quite comical... especially the thought of a satellite mowing all the oblivious characters down...

    just my thoughts.
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    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]
      Crafty, my friend, very crafty. Certainly there could be no frustration or wrong doing in such a quaint little town and a sweet array of characters.

    Did you mention a senator?, oh well that must be another story I heard lately. Oh yes, they asked the lady what she did and she replied, "the senator"

    Oh no, it was Obama sin Laden maybe, just a turn of alpha characters that pased through my mind as I read.

    Nice work, I've got alot to read over here and will be back to catch up very soon.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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