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    dots Submission Name: Double Sided Mirrordots
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    Author: LongPastDead
    Elite Ratio:    6.55 - 34/67/30
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 132
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    Description:
       It hurts in the end and it's all the same.

    The poem isn't meant to be epic or great or wonderful. It's how I feel, so if you don't like it you don't have to finish reading it.


    To the person I wrote this for:
    You should know who you are. If you don't, then obviously I've proved my point well.


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    dotsDouble Sided Mirrordots
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    I'm a ghost hidden by this double sided mirror,
    A forgotten tryst behind the glossy frame.
    You only ever saw a reflection of her,
    When it's me who was screaming your name.

    I scratched at this prison of self loathing,
    Desperately tried to grab just a single glance.
    A single whisper brought me into pitiful hoping,
    That I just might have had a chance.

    That your eyes might look for me,
    That I might not just be a faded memory.
    That maybe you'd break this glass and finally see,
    That I was always there waiting.

    I spent day and night wondering if there was a way,
    If there was a will to win the heart of my desire.
    My spoils were tear formed trophies and pain filled days,
    The fuel for a self destructive fire.

    Now I realize I'm only a distant idea,
    A fictitious plot that didn't fancy you.
    I'll sit here bleeding with my fantasy filled dreams,
    And watch the happiness grow between you two.

    I once could call myself your friend,
    A tryst that was filled with laughter and smiles.
    All you really wanted was her in the end,
    And I was just a thought to play with all the while.




    Submitted on 2008-02-11 03:19:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very beautifully sadly said. Many of us have suffered realised broken dreams. Yes, it hurts because we latch onto the wrong door knob thinking someone's love is there while in reality it is only a show of friendly gestures until a real friend comes along. By this ruptured dream we grow in a maturity of being friendly to all while not releasing our love until a spark kindles a flame in both hearts. it is a lonely hurtful world to hold on to a mere infatuation.
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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