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    dots Submission Name: the world IIdots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Dark
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       I hate the world we live in full of fear but I want to change that by any means


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    dotsthe world IIdots
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    Innocent blood spilt across the floor, rotting bodys lay everywhere.
    what is this world coming to?
    everyday I see on the news people being killed by someone that just want to make there self know or just for the plessure.
    I kill for a different reason, I kill not to be known or for the plessure, I kill for justice, valor, and to save this world from those that want to destroy it.
    The reason for my exstince is to rid this world of the demons that walk among us, to make those that are rotting this world suffer there eternal punishment.
    Because of this I can ethter go to heaven or hell for eternity but I am willing to suffer what ever comes to me.
    Someday I will show you my dream of a bright and ideal world.
    I am a trickester that does not know solitude only treachery.




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      yo dude sup,alright ima talk on a level i rarely do okay.first off, in my opinion the world must exsistce of these things, murder death ,homicde, rape and the like, in short it's the balance to people like you i guess, full of "justice, valor, and to save this world from those that want to destroy it." in your words. With no yes there is no no right?
    Second, the sheer exsistence of rightous killing is as wrong as the killing of innocent, im not critisizing you, cause even i have that random flare to clense the world,but we can't do that,only god or whoever we happen to believe in.if this is your actually mentality well then yeah talk to me and explain if ya want, defend yourself from the [censored] im saying alright.


    However, if this is jsut random writing from apart of the mind,well then its a nice thought or hope that the world (not me) could believe in

    Well thats is either way
    Kevin
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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