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    dots Submission Name: Grave Robberdots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dots Grave Robberdots

    That monstrous door, its green and brass-hinged catch
    Made fast by verdigris from years gone by
    I used a bayonet to scrape and pry,
    With strength so long I pried to strain and scratch
    To jar that lock. It seemed Id met my match!
    Cursing, I stabbed and set that brass to fly,
    It smashed against the wall. I heard a cry,
    And watched that antique door give to, unlatch!

    I heard unearthly whimpers and a moan,
    That struck my heart with fear and unknown dread,
    There in that haunted corridor, alone,
    Id stirred a thing uncouth, unclean, undead!
    She walked upright, a sleek young girl to see,
    Came to the door and took control of me.

    Submitted on 2008-02-11 13:48:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought it was great,you are good,loved the darkness of the piece.
    my only complaint would be last line seemed forced,it could have used little more,but it was cool,I will definately keep reading
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of Poe, which is perhaps the highest compliment I have ever given anyone. Really the old master's touch is woven into this piece.
    Thanks for writing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      A vile premonition, it seems!

    Dark mood indeed, but tonight...tonight I am in the mood for a dark writing as well. I see you plucked your muses out of the fertile soil and put them to good use. The intriguing and omnipresent linguistic and expressive skills continuously grace your mind and your pen. A very good read with it's own romantically obscured charm.

    Inspiration, beware! I shall come to confiscate :)


    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Golly, what a ghoulish stroll this was! Better go back to picking up the girls at the bar during cocktail hour!!

    Seriously, this has your genius for writing ghoulish and ghostly tales, and was a remarkable and delightful (if brrsome; a word that Lou here at the site invented)!

    Another glass of stout to toast the master of ghostly rhyme!
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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