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    dots Submission Name: Autumndots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1217
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       For the males, or uninitiated pli�s, arabesques, and pirouettes are ballet moves.


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    dotsAutumndots
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    I think that I could love autumn.
    I could love the arabesques of yellow.
    I could love the flaming pirouettes of orange.
    I could even love the clumsy plies of brown
    if they could dance before my eyes
    for more than a flicker.
    I think that I could love autumn
    if only the leaves did not fall and fade
    if only they could lend their color forever
    and not wither and die.







    Submitted on 2004-02-05 23:51:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The passing of those autumn oranges and yellows is too brief, isn't it? Perhaps we can genetically engineer trees that maintain that state for months at a time, but I doubt it. This is a nice poem.
    | Posted on 2004-06-08 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      Taut.
    Nought to do with seasons.
    I have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem because it was a strip tease which is in itself a good fat grasp at immortality.

    Delightful
    | Posted on 2004-02-07 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      Deep. I love the last line. Autumn is indeed a contemplative season. I like how you refer to the hues of Autumn as ballet moves (I used to take ballet, so I'm familiar with them ). Love your metaphors.. It's almost as if you're comparing Autumn to an elderly one that you love because of who they are, but hate because they have to go so fast.. If only...
    | Posted on 2004-02-06 00:00:00 | by PastelSky | [ Reply to This ]


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