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    dots Submission Name: The Vampiredots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 287/237/138
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsThe Vampiredots
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    The Vampire,
    clad in black,
    caped in darkness.

    The Vampire,
    like a cold wind;
    sending your spine tingleing.

    The Vampire,
    like tear drop;
    perfect and sad.

    The Vampire,
    like a tornado;
    destructive and powerful.

    The Vampire,
    like an Angel;
    delecacy only a mask.




    Submitted on 2008-02-11 16:51:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. It's very well written. The shortness of the stanzas and choice of wording is perfect to show the danger of the vampire.

    | Posted on 2008-06-04 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the overall quality comes from the short lines. My understanding of vampires would be that they are creatures of action, not talk. So under that supposition, this is outstanding.
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Immortalis | [ Reply to This ]
      Most intriguing look at a vampire (perhaps, not how they have been know for past thousand years, or at least until about 1980 when they suddenly became a tad kinder and gentler) love the short lines that work so well... bravo... bravo... bravo....
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      VAMPIRES AND DEMONS FOREVER
    Very nice oh and are you a vampire or demon?

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    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]
      So true, the vampires deception, the front of a person in need sent out as bait, one who feeds on the good will of others, so harsh and cold.

    Nice write.




    | Posted on 2008-02-15 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      nice ^_^make me want to be a Vampire
    | Posted on 2008-02-12 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]


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