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    dots Submission Name: So Click Your Red Shoes Dorothydots

    Author: Flowerinbloom
    ASL Info:    22/M/Earth (I think)
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 700/559/123
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 819
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       For Manuella from a friend who could not be there in your darkest time.

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    dotsSo Click Your Red Shoes Dorothydots

    You followed him here, to nowhere,
    to a dark room full of hopelessness
    and old needles in the corner.
    You stand watching him
    collapse to the floor,
    pulling his salvation from his pocket
    and introducing it to his arm.

    It's not a life you wanted.
    You never dreamt of this day,
    yet you can't escape.
    Deliverance is for those who seek it
    and you're not trying to get away.
    He offers his heaven to you
    and you take it with trembling hands.

    It kisses your arms
    and your tears dont numb the pain.
    He's laughing at you,
    telling you to breathe slow.
    You try to tell your heart
    but it doesn't listen to you anymore.
    Betrayal turned it against you.

    The hurt is screaming now
    and numbness claims your feet.
    Concern sweeps him
    but he doesn't try to catch you.
    He's up now and backing away slowly.
    You reach for him
    but he's already gone.

    The pain is crippling and you're all alone.
    You scream with your lungs
    but words won't come.
    You close your eyes
    to make the dream go away
    but the pain is real
    and it won't let go.

    The white rabbit was too hard to resist
    and now he's left you in his hole
    and he's left you all alone.
    You're wishing you didn't come,
    wishing you didn't run.
    If only you could click your red shoes Dorothy
    then you would be home.

    Submitted on 2008-02-11 17:23:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is full on fantastic imagery, the sweeping verse and rhythm draw you in very well.
    The ending is very neatly done, the reference to the two innocent Disney movies in such a macarbre poem gives it that little bit more sinister nature.
    | Posted on 2009-08-18 00:00:00 | by fictionalfiend | [ Reply to This ]
      It's haunting this piece, the way it grabs and pulls you in, cascading you with emotions most would run away from. How do you do it?

    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by AnotherNobody | [ Reply to This ]

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